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The Upside-Down Frown (Free verse) by fevriere

The upside-down frown smashed quicker than the pulse Into the bitter-sweetest decay, the hottest grey slide A thorn crown, dragged for curiosity, through the focus of eyes plasticated, buried elsewhere.

Goad 25-Jan-04/10:01 AM
oh come on, you can't demote her to the same league as CLS & snowflake.

fevriere, I share your fascination with binding words and ideas together that don't ordinarily appear in company, like amusing oneself trying to push magnets together with the same pole facing, but by themselves these little word games rarely do anything for anyone except the writer. Try doing it just once in an otherwise concrete pome. Like building a framework to hold the magnets in exactly the unnatural but interesting apposition you wish to capture. (when you're successful at this, please come back and teach me how to do it too)




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