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the small drop (Free verse) by richa

Water, runs off the gutters onto sodden stone borders, a small drop hangs from long grass like the wet wax on a candle and it is this small drop that the gods long look down on through the glass house of this earth, and weigh from every angle as though they were a sunlight.

zodiac 25-Jan-04/8:28 AM
Good as always. Comments: 1.) the comma after 'water' shouldn't be there. Maybe you could put a line break there instead. 2.) there should be some kind of punctuation after the end of the first stanza 3.) 'a sunlight' is weird when just 'they were sunlight' would be just as good. You get a nine because, though it's not perfect, it's better than all the crap getting unwarranted 9s and 10s on this site.




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