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Late Night Moon (Free verse) by lastobelus

We wake up And the moon has broken in our windows. We feel compelled to dance; The odd light reaches underneath us And places hooks in our limbs. We move about slowly, Our shadows lurching sheepishly On the wall. "Oh do you remember," she says, "When we ran through the park to the beach And fell laughing At the feet of the sea?"

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 23-Jan-04/5:31 PM
I don't understand why the moon made you into a puppet. Nor do I understand why your shadows lurched 'sheepishly'. Should it be "feet of the sea" or "foot of the sea"? You usually hear people say "at the foot of the mountain", but ne'er "at the feet of the mountain"... or is that wrong?




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