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At The Station (Free verse) by Christof

Here, full of people Going somewhere or nowhere, Either hustling for connections Or loitering with a Tennant's Or the old dear collecting for terminal patients, Here I find in the formaldehyde Of damp yellow light one dwelling thing That needs neither ticket nor vending machine: Moss, like a comic moustache That's slipped from above a bank clerk's grin And counts us rattling out and in, The loose change in the collector's tin.

richa 22-Jan-04/5:56 AM
'Or the old dear collecting for terminal patients,' is not grammatical in the poem. It needs separating from 'either hustling for connections clause' which is talking about people plural.

Other than that good, is the formaldehyde reference inspired by damien hirst?




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