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(Come find me) (Free verse) by zodiac

Come find me some chalk-white-sky morning, where I’ve been biding my time, a fallow field – I can grow a tree as well as the next man. I’m a crop of mushrooms, blindly waiting my birth, and sick of hiding – Come find me, in my horse-eaten hill-pasture – come! pull up the ground with your tunneling fingers; remind me why I’ve saved you the power of finding, and for me only the frailty of needing to be found. Come find me! For that night I rear up alone out of the dank debris of my underground labor, spreading upon the fescue my great irregular limbs – before and behind me, colossal, wet, and grotesque – you Will wish you’d come when I asked you. And you will not be dealt with kindly. And no one is coming to your rescue.

Shade_dreamer 16-Jan-04/7:19 AM
Hmmm, You had me right up to "Placental Debris" over all not bad, but not great either.
It kinda sounds like your pissed about something. If thats the case get in touch with that because it doesn't really show here.




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