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The woods house (Free verse) by zodiac

Winter came, driving the mice back in The woods house. They set traps — And he dreamed every night after that he’d be awakened By the killing arm’s flat snap, Impossibly loud in the dark, until he awoke. They caught the first one while they were Screwing. He heard, and Reached for the light. It was a bad near miss. Fur, Blood, stickpin eyes — and alive, burdened Top-heavy with the trap. They got smokes And walked unclothed around the house with things To spring the traps. He was shaken Each time, and tried not to show how he jumped when the springs Went. Then he put the hurt mouse in a sack and, Swinging it against the porch, broke Its spine. That bugged her, but her mood Changed thinking how scared he’d been, and she laughed her Old laugh later, untouching in the big bed. They screwed Sometime before dawn. They forgot rent, and the month after Forgot again on purpose; May came; When it thawed the mice went out and aired Themselves on the porch. It was spring, And his feeling that neither of them were quite there, In a house that’d vanished out of reckoning, Was always the same. All that summer and fall they wandered In the circling hills — the strange freedom of the forsaken, She called it, summer-lovely and fonder of Obscurity than he, who held his shaken Self to earth by repeating like a mantra I love her, oh at least I love her — Though if you’d asked, it would have taken Him a full minute to remember her name.

Everyone 15-Jan-04/5:03 PM
No, look, you old crone. I didn't ask for the meanings of the individual words. I asked what a "harsh, poignant talent" is, which you've failed to explain. You claim that a "harsh, poignant talent" is a talent for writing harsh, poignant stories. This is buncombe. The only way it could be right is if "X, Y talent" meant "a talent for writing X, Y stories", which it does not. Affix your shrivel'd eyes upon this proove: 1. Let P have an X, Y talent if and only if P has a talent for writing X, Y stories. 1. Let P have a talent for writing fictional, 2000-word stories. 2. Therefore P has a fictional, 2000-word talent. 3. This is buncombe. 4. Q.E.D. Or shall we take your principle further, and say that a man has a brown, German talent because he has a talent for making brown, German films? That you have a nasal, grating talent because you have a talent for producing that sort of sound?

From now on, I do not wish to hear you use the phrase "harsh, poignant" except when referring to "Ace Bandido Red" brand hot sauce.




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