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War zone (Other) by INTRANSIT

I could smell the mild odor of burned hair as I slowly pushed open the bathroom door. I thought I was a police detective as I took note of the aftermath of teenage girls. Six empty cans of hairspray strewn across the floor like spent casings from a drive by. Clumps of hair draped around the bathtub plug as if they had been ripped whole from someones' head. One lace style high heel lay direct- ly beneath the wide open window. Droplets of blood on the toilet seat like a murderers calling card. Even the sink itself had been involved in the massacre. On the back was the curling iron, still on, heating a quickly drying washcloth. On the front edge, the powdered remains of blush, the broken compact lay directly below; a junkies last hit. A lidless tube of eyeliner in the bottom of the sink bleeding down the drain, trying to die. And a fuchsia lipstick message scrawled across the mirror: "Stop using my makeup!!! BITCH!" This scared me. I walked back upstairs to the bedroom. Donna was sitting up reading and I paused just long enough before climbing into bed for her to look at me over her glasses and say: "Don't even think about saying that, Gary". It was just as well I didn't. Whatever she would have said would only confirm my worst fears.

Joe-joe 14-Jan-04/11:46 PM
Ah the joys of fatherhood. I have 2 teenaged daughters and therefore have had much experience in the "War Zone" you allude to here.....cold sweats....flashbacks...lost nights of sleep....the whole 9 yards! I like the connection you've made here between the cosmetic practices of teenaged girls and the battlefield. It definately works. The "Stop using my makeup BITCH" line made me chuckle....true love between sisters hath never been so strongly expressed! Stay strong...this too will pass. -9- See ya on the Brooklyn Queens Expressway!




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