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Victory smokes & black tiger ambrosia (Free verse) by Don-Quixote

The rumors are true; our rogue torch kissed the sky 'n whispered adieu with its scarlet flame sigh. Tuesdays spent with sibyl foretold that even tigers will purr; a killers sly smile appears subtle eclipsing the wicked saboteur. A rejected opaline rose choked wilting on a citrus veranda; I watched it die and smoked as petals veiled the sycamore floor. We've been rollin down groove street smokin on victory 'n o.d.ing on fresh injections of complacency and bitter vinegar defeat. Sunday suns blaze humid on this dirt road of loathing that I travel upon, intrepid- murderous red lips cursing; drinking black ambrosia groovin to the blue-collar blues 'n rollin sublime nimbus spliffs. Night tigers softly purr as we growl in victory; the wicked saboteurs grinning in sweet revery of our preys vinegar defeat. Fangs kiss bloody flesh 'n whisper sweet adieu with my fervid devil sigh; the last kiss before you die.

Goad 13-Jan-04/1:33 PM
Your critique is flawed in every point, as I will demonstrate:

i) Tool have only the one song, so far as I know
1) If you put hemlock in vinegar, it is very bitter indeed. Hemlock is what they used to kill Socrates (possibly mixed with opium)
2) that was an interesting experience, but had no effect one way or the other on my reading of the poem
3) on the other hand, torpid still finds occasional use & can even be considered, though marginally, acceptable. Is this not unfair?
4) you stole point 4 from eratosphere, where I believe they have it set up as an auto-responder to all posts originating from ip's that have at any time in the past been associated with pomeranker
5) and tigers, hence Hobbes, hence by association Calvin, representative of little boys, and what is the yearning to express oneself in amateur poetics other than the little boy (or girl) in all of us giving voice to his little boyness? (or little girlness, as the case may be)
6) jimi
7) the strength of the magnetic force field of the earth has declined by MORE THAN 10% in the past 20 years (requires schizophrenia)




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