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Malaysia (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

Mostly managed to chew the chum, misinterpreted nostalgia or dignity for some Elegant denizens of the fifth layer celibate, repent and send messages with a furor like sedatives disdain for the tenement left me empty and innocent but I felt so far away from my lovers and miscreants This is not fantasia, or south central asia, and how can I express the pulse of Malaysia? but as a wayward third word, twice past the oppression, repenting and venting the last one's trangressions

Crakyamuni 10-Jan-04/7:57 PM
The end is crap, I will be the second to say so. If you have "constructive" criticism, I'm all eyes. I'm really just a hack here horus. I paint and make shit. It sounds savage, but it is. The last lines were Casteneda influenced, but I'm no warrior. More of a dreamer. Or a drunkard.




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