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Harry the Moon (Free verse) by Mimi & Vincent

When you look upon the sky Harry the Half Moon is saying hi Little Mimi ask him why Why do people live and die Harry reponds with a hopeless sigh Don't ask don't ask don't ask me why I would rather live and die Sing, dance, work to taste real life Inquisitive Mimi persists to ask Harry why Why do people live and die Babies love to give out a mid-night cry Sex and violence posioned teenagers' spine Money and status make one's blind Tumors and sickness could deprive our pride People live and then close their eyes Why why why and why

Everyone 8-Jan-04/11:20 AM
MEDIOCRITY CHECKLISTE

[X] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] Arbitrary indentation
[_] Arbitrary line breaks
[X] Clerical errors
[_] Ellipses used overabundantly
[_] Lower case only
[_] Internet shorthand / emoticons
[X] Repetition of a word or phrase ad nauseam
[_] Devoid of rhyme
[_] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, etc)
[_] Devoid of other literary devices (metaphor, synaesthesia, etc)
[_] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery
[_] About drugs
[_] About romantic love
[_] About suicide or self-mutilation
[_] About writing
[X] Cliched imagery (tears falling like rain, angel in heaven)
[X] Cliched rhymes (love/above, heart/apart)
[X] Sounds like dialogue in a fantasy novel
[_] Melodramatic
[_] Autobiographical but in the third person
[_] Concerns the author's social pastimes
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Vicarious wish fulfilment
[_] Pointedly unanswered questions
[X] Smugly-named protagonist
[_] Sanctimonious
[_] Untitled
[_] Gushingly religious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[_] Rage against the machine
[_] Self-obsessed

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