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Is this life real? (Free verse) by singinkygal

Life goes on time doesn't wait. Is there such thing as control or is it all left up to fate? How about true love or total happiness? Those of us in love would say absolutely yes. How about purpose or do we make our own? Should we wait and see or will it ever be known? Do we really choose our life's direction the path we want to take, or is it someone else's plan the choices that we make? Is this life real or are we in someone else's dream if so what happens when they wake? Of course its real hmmmm or so it seems.

richa 28-Dec-03/12:05 PM
The end is a bit trite: 'of course it is real (or so it seems)' is not going to add to centuries of debate about human existence.

Is this life real sounds like some innanity from a j-lo song too.

Aside from this though, I certainly like the fluid phrasing.




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