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Toes (Free verse) by BadPoet

TOES I'm glad I've got toes Two rows Of five, just enough. It sure must be tough On those With a 'six' and a 'four' Or two dozen or more. . They're best at the front Not the side Of the foot Which would then be too wide And beside That your shoe Would look funny on you. . They're no use perched high on the instep Or by Themselves, Spaced all around And an inch off The ground. . If all on one foot they'd Been put Nicely displayed But .... With design so misguided We'd look Very lopsided. . I'm glad they are there Just where My foot stops A toe pops Out, with four spare I've A total of five. .

nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
"and beside/That your show" I think would work better as "and beside that/your shoe"; The break between by and themselves doesn't scan well. All in all, I have to say I love this poem. :)




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