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Reality (Free verse) by ThoughtfulSoul

Sometimes I wonder if it's all not real That I'm caught in this ongoing nightmare that one day I might wake out of I keep thinking that life can't be this bad if there really is a God So it has to be a figment of my torn up imagination I'm like a caged animal I can see the world around me But I can't interact with it There are instances where I feel free But eventually I realize that I'll never be What's sad is that sometimes It all hits me and I know that this life is real and I know that I have to deal with it So I begin to act normal Swallow the fears I have and live through this so called life

writteninskin 5-Aug-02/10:15 AM
I like the poem. I'm not bitchy or rude like most of the people I have seen on this site. The poem could use a little work, which is why i didn't give you a higher score. I wrote poetry similar to this when I was starting out years ago, and even know, one or two of this style will slip out. Perhaps if you added some punctuation in the right places, it would help give the poem a bit more "kick", so to speak. Many poets use punctuation to signify pauses, breaks, and stops. Good job though, I enjoyed it.




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