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endless eternity: (Free verse) by Sapphire

waves crash a steady beat pounding shores in rhyme time suckles of mother natures teat all the while man remains blind the shifting sands run through a slick channel lost souls still wander the ages a taste rolls in mouths of unwary - banal yet they never see they are within cages

nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
the title is a strike against -- redundant. I can't find the rhythm or flow of the piece, but the images are beautiful and I feel I've got the feel of the whole. ... :)




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