poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on mine own battle: by Sapphire.

nentwined16 Mar 2002

"forward in sight" reads as "forward incite", and it hurts my mental ear to rip it to the written meaning... I also don't get "sooner state of mind light". The rhyming, and the "smite" don't work for me, and I can't get a cohesive image or statement out of it. :(