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mine own battle: (Free verse) by Sapphire

a sooner state of mind light blindly stabbing forward in sight pray to your dominion slight your animal howl in the night bend, twist deadlock strike fizz of fear in merciless fright static crackle, crunch of bite strike me down with tempered might those of you who wield the sword of smite

nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
"forward in sight" reads as "forward incite", and it hurts my mental ear to rip it to the written meaning... I also don't get "sooner state of mind light". The rhyming, and the "smite" don't work for me, and I can't get a cohesive image or statement out of it. :(




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