Shuushin3 Nov 2003
I've come to recognize your stuff as one I should click on and expect goodness.
This one has a fresh thought to it, and as a lyric works really quite well, I think.
If you want to tweak it more, you could thin it out here and there so that stuff like this:
"i just dont want to be
old polaroids in a small shoe box
as sepia seeps
and yellows my face.
so tell me, do you see me"
which rocks, isn't diluted by less memorable sentiments.