<{Baba^Yaga}>30 Oct 2003
"As I wake I go to the window , there I focus my eyeâs on the poodle." pull your comma tight and pull the apostrophe out of "eye's".
"circler" is spelled circular
"with their ass" should be on their ass.
"He bends even more and I start to get stiff.
I can see the seams giving way for his pants to rip.
So I wait quiet, and then it goes.
And there lies low an behold.
he looks around to see if anyone saw
which tickled my fancy.
I leave the door window and
I head to the bed,
for I have finished my job.
I lay on back and think of what I seen.
Then I reach in and start rubbing the knob.
Voyeur of the year, join the club.
peep fiend . . ." Now little brother this is too vague? you must make it clearer for your readers in order for them to get what you're saying.