Shuushin27 Oct 2003

Pretty excellently done. Wonderful language use and the thing is polished up quite nicely.

the use of "sanguine" gives me a little pause though - I can appreciate the aliteration it gives, and I see you've tied it in with the last stanza - but I just can't roll over it. Prolly just me. Maybe it's *because* of the alliteration with "submerged"? Maybe swap out submerged instead?