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Backyard (Free verse) by <~>

Late September's new grass sprouts on either side of the new-laid fieldstone path that winds, sinuous, to a bench of weather-worn oak and iron, secluded beneath the berry tree out back, in a private garden that looks out on the marsh bathed in slanting sunlight at autumnal eqinox.

richa 24-Oct-03/12:52 AM
Quite difficult to follow,

I thought mid sentence line breaks only worked when it sets up an expectation, this does not really do that.

It is quite soothing but I think the line breaks interrupt the feeling.




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