richa23 Oct 2003

Like the line 'sun hangs like salem heretics'

Especially with the church theme, not so much an image I guess as a comment.

'Am I trespassing on God' is a nice comment to explore(perhaps a bit more).

The images though good are rather arbitrary.

Word choice I think should make the reader ask why you included certain details and not others, and should strike deep at the meaning of the poem.

Definitely a poem with merit though.