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My Chocolate F-9 (Free verse) by abecedarian

Spruce billets the top Maple the back, sides, and neck Thickness sanded the sides and sawn straight Bended the wood not too wet to break Joined the plates and carved for days And finally now it rings D sharp Just as it should Everything left is a month between me and my chocolate F-9 Until finally I can hear it sing The urge to rush is unbearable a disaster in waiting So patience and do this right Just as I should

<~> 22-Oct-03/11:37 AM
what about the varnish? talk about the pines that gave it, and how patient they were to give their blood for the sharpened D of eternity.

maybe you drink a chocolate colored guiness (or 2) while you wait for the chocolate varnish to dry.

the last quatrain--just scrap it, and go from there.

why do we run out of steam like that, i wonder?




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