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Toku (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

NATURE! Toku shouts NATURE! in the midst, in the center surrounded, hands high, as others grip the slick rails and turn amused eyes, He laughs HA! NATURE! and the Thunderbeings laugh back! NATURE! in the mist tasting NATURE! on fingers and cheeks, soaking NATURE! in clothing and hair, Toku laughs HA! and the Maiden smiles back.

poetandknowit 21-Oct-03/7:57 PM
I disagree with you and hatter's hare. Bub and Richa I think fall into the same category, although the bub utilizes more concrete language. Their poems are fragmented. Well thought out in their heads, but incomplete at times on paper. You can disagree all you want, but the fact is the picture makes the poem make sense. Look at some of the other comments. We don’t know who Toku is thus the exuberance is nil. You simply mentioning a name and screaming out NATURE in my mind doesn’t complete the poem or capture completely the rawness of the moment. With the picture I see who this guy is and the body langue in the photos, etc, etc, that isn’t in the poem. The image could be more complete.




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