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Toku (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

NATURE! Toku shouts NATURE! in the midst, in the center surrounded, hands high, as others grip the slick rails and turn amused eyes, He laughs HA! NATURE! and the Thunderbeings laugh back! NATURE! in the mist tasting NATURE! on fingers and cheeks, soaking NATURE! in clothing and hair, Toku laughs HA! and the Maiden smiles back.

Shuushin 21-Oct-03/7:32 PM
Nutty and impressive (in the way that it leaves an impression).

I like the unusual formatting.

On the downside, I feel like there is an oversimplification, or a misunderstanding someplace; just a feeling.




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