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Toku (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

NATURE! Toku shouts NATURE! in the midst, in the center surrounded, hands high, as others grip the slick rails and turn amused eyes, He laughs HA! NATURE! and the Thunderbeings laugh back! NATURE! in the mist tasting NATURE! on fingers and cheeks, soaking NATURE! in clothing and hair, Toku laughs HA! and the Maiden smiles back.

poetandknowit 21-Oct-03/7:16 PM
The fact that Z has to send/post a picture of the event for the poem to really to take hold hurts the poem. Maybe you could give the reader just a bit more to make it make sense of what and why it (i.e. “Nature” is being said. I am afraid that the name just doesn’t cut it. Of course, I am sure hatter’s hare will disagree, but what does she know, she only drinks pilsner. I think we get that idea when we look at the picture, but alone I think the poem fails. Initially I was afraid you had holed up in the john with a tattered copy of “Iron John”.




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