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Facial Bliss (Haiku) by ARTIE

Hedonistic grin nectar clinging to your chin Savory display

?-Dave_Mysterious-? 17-Oct-03/5:30 PM
Savory display is a totally bodacious line to end a haiku with. However, the previous lines do not do it justice. I suggest something like:

Oh, such tasty treats,
Sausage rolls and cheese pasties,
Savory display.




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