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Dancing on Glass (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

Red droplets soaked into the floor Of a factory swept clean Angry words of a lost tongue Written to be read by a dancer's eyes Circles and more if you can connect the dots Memories hidden in a scarlet hue The best secrets are hidden in plain view

Shuushin 13-Oct-03/5:11 PM
The ending is fairly awesome.

I don't like that [the droplets] soaked into the floor; either I think of a cement floor in a factory, or via the title, a glass floor.




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