Shuushin6 Oct 2003

I like the image - of slicing part of oneself to give to another. That is really conveyed entirely in the second stanza; I struggle to find meaning in the first.

Dampen deep? Damp and deep? maybe just an interesting coinage - maybe some change? words dripping like tears is - used.

I think the first stanza was just a warm up exercise for the second (this is not uncommon) - let it evaporate like sweat, and keep the second as a base for something very nice.