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silent struggle (Free verse) by princesszoe

as i sing words drip like tears from the depth of me i look in your eyes, so dampen deep and blue and wonder what is down there, in you i try to touch hard with my deepest heart which bounces off unnoticed my smallest is contained in you, owned no less for my silence i protest with screams suppressed too often still with buoyant heart i slice from me and serve it straight to you

Shuushin 6-Oct-03/7:30 PM
I like the image - of slicing part of oneself to give to another. That is really conveyed entirely in the second stanza; I struggle to find meaning in the first.

Dampen deep? Damp and deep? maybe just an interesting coinage - maybe some change? words dripping like tears is - used.

I think the first stanza was just a warm up exercise for the second (this is not uncommon) - let it evaporate like sweat, and keep the second as a base for something very nice.




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