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paper boats (Free verse) by sally6479

it's a memory we all have harbours in the gutter It may have been my grandfather but the memory isn't clear I remember his hands carefully folding the newspaper but I don't recall the folds fold it one way then the other a hundred different combinations but I can't get it right I ask you but you forget aswell the memory is there but it's vague I should ask him but I can't the memory is vague maybe it belongs to someone else

tadpole 27-Sep-03/10:18 PM
I like some of the ideas and the memories that you are talking about, but it kind of falls apart and rambles a little towards the end. I bet you could put it together better.




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