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this meal was knowledge (Free verse) by nentwined

This meal was "MADE IN CHINA" thousands of years ago with parts that very well could have been g . r . o . w . n here, this Not China where I live and e . a . t this sum of knowledge exported by mind in standards of the time, imported after implementation, instantiation, this sum of knowledge is rendered moot in the babel of the bowels, food for some other living entity: Unmade in the U. S. of A. like so many other things.

Geschäftsreise 23-Sep-03/6:08 PM
You rung my bells. Good.

I would come up with a more repugnantly digestive phrase for 'rendered moot'. Also I would delete the 'food for some other living entity' line. Some buffing here and there and I would be proud to call it my baby.

We do grow some good shit here every now and then, though, you have to admit.




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