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under my skin (Free verse) by bitter

grinding hard to make you pure i dug a hole and poured you inside keeping you under my skin and wiped up the dust left over so they couldn't take you away

nentwined 22-Sep-03/6:14 PM
I think this could make a very interesting painting; you definitely got enough imagery there. I stumble for cadence on the second line.

If I had a 'personal favorites' section implemented, this would be added to it just for the picture I'm seeing. On the off chance that I'd try to paint it someday. meanwhile, I'll just make a note to myself on skwerms.org. :) 7, still, for its slight awkwardness, and I don't see it going over an 8, for content. odd, that.




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