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Ah! That Love Would'st Lead Me (Concrete) by EggbertShootsFire

Ah! That Love would'st lead me Down these garden paths in May Entwining fingers passing 'Tween hazy fleurs flourishing On a blurred and xanthene day. Yet rather than that lovely visage I've been gone and lead astray; Afore these hours waking I've no gentle whispers speaking Save my heart, in sad dismay. Ah! That Love would keep me From Her torturing wing of thorns- And the silent, fevered shadow 'Neath her brilliant-seeming halo, Viewed solely by a love forlorn. And would that I could leave him! He, whose tone has pierced me through; Clad in white and softly smiling, With my tender heart left writhing, As these shameless tears renew. Ah! That Love would'st lead me Toward His wond'rous arms outspread- But alas; this springtide's turned, And this lovely May's adjourned With December in its stead.

EggbertShootsFire 29-Jul-02/8:15 PM
You might have at least quoted phrases that I actually INCLUDED in the poem. This was written for Blake (in his style) in celebration of his surgery, which allowed him to be able to finally walk for the first time in his life. But have a nice day, regardless of your opinion of my work.




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