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reflexion - dayspring to dusk (Free verse) by DreamerSupreme

you are dreamer, sleeping and walking across the sword long and keen, piercing the center of the stream, pullulating dampening the bloody rocks where silence lay. vibration triggering explosion illusion made real, visions blossom from flower. drinking hour, immersed in the waters of life but breath will not come about.

DreamerSupreme 18-Sep-03/9:57 AM
well, other than it appearing like kiddie scrawl at the start, whats wrong with it? the label "dreamer" has MANY meanings behind it, and leads to other interesting things.

your four year old niece could say that, sure, but would her saying it serve a purpose in any piece of writing what-so-ever?

what would you suggest?




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