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Up for a game? (Free verse) by LuckyJoe

Dazing off in pure entertainment, A belt sea sawing, the pivot an index finger, Not paying attention to the conversation around, All that matters is this simple thing. Attached to the belt a circular case, The minds embrace encased, Time for the unleashing has come. Unzip releasing the demons cage, Two unite as one, A cue stick, their favorite toy. “Up for a game ten or twenty a rack?”

LuckyJoe 18-Sep-03/12:53 AM
Thank you for the vote and the comment. I'll try to find a little bit of time to attempt to make it flow. Sometime tomorrow I'm sure I'll give it a look over. Thanks for the ideas. They should be useful I see the lack of flow.




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