nentwined17 Sep 2003

pleasantly fun. a couple points where I'm not sure if you meant what you say or not (manor or manner? both make sense... "a wisp of wanting breath?" waning? or... I can kinda see wanting, but not quite a wisp of it. leaning towards wanting "separated by our thoughts" to be "separated by our thought" ...

"die" into the depths, or "dive" into the depths? cna see both, but it's not entirely clear that it's not a typo.

7.5, leaning towards 7 for now.