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none (Free verse) by tadpole

I am proud I congradulate my sorry self inside No one knows My persona displays humility of mind I detest it Ever endeavoring to be rid of it I am aware True confidence I crave The source of which I found is actually near I'm not so bad I think to myself in silence I am wrong Left alone my nature's capable of every kind of violence

J.B. Manning 3-Sep-03/1:07 PM
interesting. It ALMOST works really well, but there is something about the ryme that feels forced. Like, it's not exactly what you wanted to say, but the only thing you could put there to complete the rythm. I think you can do better. Good though.




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