abecedarian3 Sep 2003

Is the fault you see the double use of 'in'?
Well tehcnically it is a double use, but
that's the nice thing about the old school use of "i'",
I feel like it negates that - allowing me a subtle break in the 'rules'. You don't agree?

Thank you immensely for the help and suggestios, but I think I'll concentrate on other poems. I think this one is doomed to a singular success (my own mind).