Poemranker [Replying] Fri Nov 22 08:52:07 PST 2024

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The Banishment of Don Quixote (Free verse) by abecedarian

Lance broken windmill shattered a bloody pool of innocence and Don Quixote cleaning his blade - his cleft tongue newly born of a snake's taste for blood CervantÃ©s' head held upright by the only hand that remains true, for the other has just committed an act no author can leave unpunished - its dignity and honor as false as the face of romance is to its nature. There is now only murder as the pen, dragged too deep i' the page in passion destroys all beauty and substance therein a depreciated legacy left forever unmended as CervantÃ©s surrenders his quill to oblivion and stumbles away.

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3-Sep-03/10:50 AM

no, i knew that dq was a character, but without a deep familiarity with the text, your message is lost on me. i have merely surface knowledge--to know the author, the character, the quest--

so, if you want to leave this poem to reveal its message only to those with cervantes fresh in thier minds, i don't see a problem with writing to an erudite audience.

but you see, i am no dunce, and try as i might, i cannot unravel it. and, hatters hare is probably the most intelligent person i know, and she gave you some valid crit.

i am merely trying to show you that you are not communicating clearly.

where is the point in writing a poem like this, if no one gets the joke?

maybe h gets it--he's a sponge for info. but, without more context clues--like the tidbit you left out about the head being held up--i am at a loss.

you are welcome for the humor. i only wish it had transgressed into understanding.

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