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The Banishment of Don Quixote (Free verse) by abecedarian

Lance broken windmill shattered a bloody pool of innocence and Don Quixote cleaning his blade - his cleft tongue newly born of a snake's taste for blood Cervantés' head held upright by the only hand that remains true, for the other has just committed an act no author can leave unpunished - its dignity and honor as false as the face of romance is to its nature. There is now only murder as the pen, dragged too deep i' the page in passion destroys all beauty and substance therein a depreciated legacy left forever unmended as Cervantés surrenders his quill to oblivion and stumbles away.

abecedarian 2-Sep-03/10:04 PM
- The forked tongue is from licking his blade
- "for the other [hand]... its dignity and honor as false..."
- The act the hand commits is betrayal.
- Also, read "The Depreciated Legacy of Cervantes".

As for the false face of romance, that is meant to be cleared up in stanza 3. The heart of my poem is stanza three and I absolutely think it is one of the best lines I've ever written
(predicts the 'which is not saying much' comment)

This is one of those things where if you see where I'm coming from the entire poem is clear and subtle. Please please please if you could humour me I honestly believe that this poem is worthwhile (if somewhat viscous). Please give it some time.




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