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Addiction leaving by death (Free verse) by LuckyJoe

These drugs inside me, They have long since taken over. Running thick as blood, through my vanes. Having concurred my mind, Making me now question is I’m sane. Sense I once had is gone; Out the window it went waving so long. Like a song stuck in my head, Withdraw always repeating; making me ill. Intake a little more… Found in a trance starring at the door. Entering forth to this hell to renew my high. I sigh thinking of what could be… If only I could stand and walk away, Not come back the next day. Again I’m back… The pain of withdraw overcame, Is it my addiction that makes me this way? Or is it my fear of what reality has in store. Get loaded forget about everything but feeling. This wonderful feeling having no shame, mellow. Stuck in this world not being able to worry. Life seems to be fading away. This is something new, My heart is racing, skipping a beat. Pacing so fast, the pounding is unbearable. Vision is fading everything a blur. Walk to the restroom to gather myself. Relieving pressure, shaking can’t aim. Pain is taking over… took too much. Reaching for help… Grabbing for support don’t want to fall. Nothing stable, come crashing down. On the ground taking my last look, Inside my chest feeling a balloon burst. Death is now inside me, The blur fading…dissipating…darkness…

LuckyJoe 25-Aug-03/4:18 PM
I'll agree that it needs work. But I don't agree that it sounds like something bob dole would write. I'm a recovering druggy I've been there I've done and felt the stuff in this poem. Do you know what it feels like wanting to quit and not being able to...keep saying you're going to and everyday again you're doing something to get by. Get excited for weeks and sit around in a trance without a thought in your head.
What made me decide it was time to give everything up was when I had a breakdown... I wake shaking out of control, my heart racing a million beats a minute.

Everyone has an idea of what drugs do... but they don't have a real clue until they've had to start start at zero and below and rebuild their life because of how deep into them they were. It took near death for me to finally see the light.




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