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Aphrodite (edited) (Sonnet) by Caducus

From Poseidon, Aphrodite appeared, With eyes aquamarine that shone, From virgin sight I was endeared, The ocean bowed which she walked upon. Semitic goddess of rapturous deity, Embrace me like you do the earth. Salt from my eyes for you I lay at sea, Let my sadness of envy be our mirth. But from the zealous palms of Cronus, The sickle splits my flesh to froth, Son’s of Hesiod come to stone us, My blood mixes in to salty broth, And I spread around her immortal flesh, And we are one in togetherness.

Caducus 22-Aug-03/11:37 AM
You're right about hath doth it was the one line i had problems with. I have stayed true to the story inventing me as the love interest to complete the sonnet and juice something out of the fable. Also line 1 was a tad over adventurous, she was born from an oyster(one of many theories) but I have simplified the opening.

My 1st sonnet and there bloody hard.




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