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Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed (Free verse) by DreamerSupreme

My eyes gaze over the trailor park scene of my life. America to me is an endless stretch of fields with motorhomes parked permanently on dark soil. Morgan drinks his moon shine, freshly distilled from the last night, cursin about the flies that invaded his living space. Cindy is in the field by the trees rough housing like the tomboy she is. She lifts her skirt for anyone that has two dollars and a pair of blindfolds. Dirt roads stretch across the rolling hills like brown veins. The local mom and pop gas station decorates my windows view, its neon sign blinking Mill r s G s Statoin. Miller Ferrows never could spell that well...

Joe-joe 20-Aug-03/2:33 PM
What can I say, we both suck! Hey Dreamster, lets end this silliness and agree to either not comment on eachothers work or offer only constructive criticism.... no matter how blunt and to the point it may be. If you dont like what I do lay it on me but be constructive. I'm here to work at becoming a better writer as I'm sure you are. i must admit, the verbal sparring is fun but it does get old quickly. I'm a well intentioned guy and you're a good kid. Bright too. So how about it. Let's shake hands and start a new relationship. Wadda ya think? Joe.




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