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Dialogism (Sonnet) by Nicholas Jones

People endure, explain ourselves through pain - strong structures mean that we can thus construct a niche just for one mind. You walked in rain to prove you would, when I myself was tucked in a bed of warmth with softness over me and cocoa by my side. For I am cursed by my own failings - mediocrity is me, while you are always well immersed in all you are. But I have no deeper mind, no crises or delight, while you amaze me with your long conflict toward such finds. All this I do admire, but my mind says: As to such as you belongs the modern world Profundity eludes me, but is my goal.

Nicholas Jones 14-Aug-03/3:39 AM
Thnak you for your very nice comments. I'm glad you like it, and I agree the key to a good sonnet is for the sentences to flow over the lines. As for the extra beats, yes, guilty as charged. I'm not certain it matters all that much, I'm not a stickler for the rules. And the couplet sort of rhymes, in a very vague way. I'd rather have a half-rhyme at the end than a full rhyme that feels forced.




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