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The Well (Free verse) by Caducus

The well is now dry, Yet the bucket keeps coming, Falling in to darkness. Wishes drowned in silver. Ageing Queens weigh me down. A distant circle of light, But the miry walls keep me trapped, There is a ladder, But I’ve forgotten how to climb. (inspired by Jeremi Handrinos)

basit_i 13-Aug-03/10:04 PM
Great. More elaboration on the last four lines, perhaps, might have added something still more?
Just a thought.




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