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Discomfort (Free verse) by FoulSanctity

I sit down. Discomfort at first, However I soon find myself relieved. Someone enters. They sit next to me, Though there is a wall that separates us. There is silence For several seconds. I find myself unable to focus. Suddenly: "Ughhhhhhhh!" The silence has been broken, and I smirk. I return To my own duties, Pleased it was not I who interrupted. My task completed, I pull up my pants And step out into the humidity.

http://mulberryfairy 12-Aug-03/10:11 AM
That was good. I knew it was a bathroom at first, because of the word "relieve"- but then I thought maybe it was someone going to confession. I don't know if you did that on purpose, but confession/public restroom ambiguity works for me.




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