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Musings: Willow Sculpture (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

Oh weeping willow! You cause me to ruminate upon the tears that slide along slender, lachrymose blades, enshrouding your stooped form. My calm examination leaves me to conclude that your legion of keen leaves exist only to sheathe the humiliation of your failure. I consider your timid stance a decrepit show of defiance which makes me think: You are not a weeping willow, but a living statue; the frozen image of opprobrium. ----------------------------------------------------------- This is how I write willow poems luckjoe... enjoy the curse that I just did engrave and burn on your forehead.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 11-Aug-03/7:07 AM
you should be. If you genuinely cannot see how forced and stupid your poeme sounds as a direct result of injudicious use of a dictionary, then there is no hope for you. You wanna hit the big leagues and play hardball with the cool-cats and hipsters like me, you gotta be sharp and classy like me. Learn the moves kid. Because ten years from now you'll thank me for it, and then you'll know it takes more than a cursory rumination upon the frozen image of opprobrium to make it in this business.

Forget it kid - it's Chinatown.




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