Don-Quixote10 Aug 2003

Stooped:

1: Bend one's back forward from the waist on down
2: Debase oneself morally, act in an undignified, unworthy, or
dishonorable way <- this really gives a nice touch.. :)

5: Carry oneself, often habitually, with head, shoulders, and
upper back bent forward.

3/4 was about sagging and descending quickly..

I think stooped worked well, in all respects, course i wouldnt mind a thought from you concerning what you would have chosen.

ah, leaves, well.. fuck, i could say foliage! inspiration. thanks for pointing that one out, i made a revision to my computer copy. I could also change the first leave into left.

a minor bump.

and, i dont think any poem stands unmoved..either the poet moves it or- remembering my boring earth science classes, water makes stone turn into sand, its just a matter of time (depending on your opinion concering time anyway.)

Dont worry about being wrong or whatever, i dont mind nitpicks at my stuff, i goto places other than here ya know, and i get people rewriting it in wierd ways saying "This will work better, and blah blah..." but its not that bad, it actually helps, depending on the critic.

anyway, enjoy the drunken poetry, im also intoxicated: meth/pina colada's ;)