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1967 Ford Carmine Jalopy (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

Emerald eyes gaze over dented metal painted a faded ruby red; the shell that coats my broken down 1967 Ford. The pathetic sight of this deformed vehicle invokes the frustrated sighs of self pity. Jean-clad ass cheeks slide into an off-white leather seat. My inner universe descends into a twilight trance. Frayed tires roam intumescing ferroconcrete, unfolded infinitely along the gangdoms of Los Angeles. My tongue besmeared scorched, vodka flavored lips, while uttering vulgar complaints in a spout of california road rage. Thoughts effuse in a super-sonic flux, focused on how I'm gonna pay back my Korean peddler for all those opiate influenced nights that were mulcted onto my tab. Inflamed eyeballs glare through my begrimed windshield to discover scores of abandoned hondas, wagons, and S.U.V's. Damned yuppies appreciate nothing. Their compact, jap-made tin cans are conveniently designed to fit in the sardine slots of sun-baked parking lots. Rarely do I ever find a goddamn polished, achromatic double bed for my over the hill pollution machine.

Don-Quixote 10-Aug-03/2:40 AM
Yeah, sure you can call me supreme..
horus once called me supremely head in the clouds once that i recall.. heh.. course, my actual name is Lee. ;)

My funny friend, i dont string shit together unless its going to make some amount of sense.. take out a dictionary and tell me what phrases i made that didnt make a damn wittle of sense oki?

Dont worry about me needing to do this, I DID do just that before picking the words. And even before playing with the wordy cafe universe, i did two drafts and worked the damned thing out.

course, im human, so take a crack at it and lets see if i did the dictionary magic correctly.

also, i dont actually live in LA.. im in san jose, this is an almost pure creation of me imagination space adventure...
i drive a nice pair of muscled legs and rough soled feet.. heh.

And, yeah it can decrease ones effectiveness, but it all depends on HOW you do it..

and dude, talkin about comin around to burn my nonexistent car is a bit scary.. i mean, i am called "supremeDreamer" lol.

and bout the enviroment, cmon man.. bush is in office, save it. ;P




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