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Portsmouth belle 3 (Free verse) by Garrett S Sexton

O flat chested Annie, she lit up the streets, after the taverns had closed Tall and lean, like the bean but with a rum-red rosy nose O flat chested Annie, she'd take anybody's money and your honey she would be Her favours, though not cheap could not be beat, and to reap the benefits you sow O flat chested Annie, her arse was her fanny and her cock for you always stood proud O flat chested Annie, worked for her money and always worked best amongst a crowd

ecargo 8-Aug-03/5:43 PM
Ha--Garrett, there's some funny shit here. Might be even more effective if you carried the meter from the first stanza into each stanza--some of the changes would be pretty easy (o flat chested Annie, she'd take anyone's money/and anyone's honey she'd be . . . and always worked best [in] a crowd, etc.), some would take a little more work, but it'd read more like the ballad it seems to want to be. "Her arse was her fanny"--meh.

Liked this.




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