SupremeDreamer8 Aug 2003

Nice note about "The bottom just sounds copied and forced to be something it doesn't want to be."

"The lake of tears slap"

Lake of tears? can you use some like... imagination?
the top can never be what it wants to be, even at the top, due to it being fattened with worthless cliche crap like that.

"Alone it stands,"

my god.. yeah, that really was an original way to see it.. this needs some style..

looks like it should be titled:

A Poet Weeping on a Pillow...

Stop whining, god thats fucking boring.. skull fuck me to death amazing, i almost blinked.. but no.

I passed out, and i was on meth.. no offense, just my lil ole opinion..

Other than that, its worth an 8, so thats your blessing.

go in peace..