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A Circle Starts with C (Free verse) by rusty

The precision of a mattress is sleep. Tonight the matress cleaves as you enter. The mattress pretends to sleep as you cleave to the outside of my precision. You shake. I shake it on the mattress, which is not happy because I usually choose the floor. The floor is happy even though it needs refinishing. You get up to leave. I run to the door. The floor is malcontent. You're already halfway down the stairs. I go on stairing one by one, but forget about you once you're out of sight. I run back into my room and trip over my feet hitting my head on the mattress. They both giggle. I throw my phone at the mattress. The floor chuckles. I masturbate and cum on the floor to show it who's boss. The mattress screams, "Touche". I jump up and down on the mattress knocking the phone on the floor and hear the receiver. I forgot to say goodbye. I call you and get your mechanical voice. I say, "How about a quickie tomorrow"? Your line is silent.

rusty 6-Aug-03/2:12 PM
two questions, first in line four is it the use of "cleave" that is confusing? and I agree with your comment about "they both giggle" but as I sit her and look at the poem I realize that I'm trying to get to the action of throwing the phone at the mattress. The anger for that action comes from the remark or sound from the two. Do you have any thoughts on how else I could get to that action? because of course I need to bring in the phone so the call can be made.




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